God are you kidding, if your a serious artist LA ink is the last place you should be going for advise on how to tattoo, that show is a blemish in the world of tattoo and should be burned off and doused in alcohol to prevent further contamination.
I think the face needs shading (cheekbones would help), and the wings need more detail too. Put in little feathers and maybe add some soft grey clouds around the outside edges.